tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7953278247719046924.post9180558854292508103..comments2023-07-22T08:49:10.796+01:00Comments on Pineapple Lightning: Query Critique Utsavhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03433651206976393579noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7953278247719046924.post-59331506669595192322013-01-15T17:57:55.180+00:002013-01-15T17:57:55.180+00:00It's not just you, Brighton -- my eyes kept tr...It's not just you, Brighton -- my eyes kept tripping on "Potesters", too.<br />I also agree that unveiling the Potesters as the bad guys, not the Spurons, is too much of a giveaway. It sounds like it's meant to be a huge turning point in the plot, and is supposed to shock the reader as it does Valora. You don't want the shock to come during the book jacket blurb; you want it while deep inside the story.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com